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A fathers rage Prologue How could a normal ten year old boy end up with two armed assassins chasing him down the street? Henry’s sneakers pounded against the pavement-or was it his heart? He made a right turn into Jackal Street his pursuers less than twenty metres behind. He was running like he had never before and was getting extremely tired. The scrub of a wide forest was over the fence as he tried scaling it but didn’t have much luck. His pursuers threw him down onto the ground the pain was quite brutal but he couldn’t worry about that now he had much bigger problems. He managed to bring himself to his feet and back away, he was scared out of his wits, but managed to look up at the two men in balaclavas. He tried to speak to them but his mouth produced no words it was dry as if it hadn’t felt water for days. The two masked men stood there perfectly still as if daring Henry to move. He finally found his voice “what do you want”? Henry asked. One of the men spoke “we want nothing but your life “Henry thought about making a run for it but he knew it was hopeless besides even if he had wanted to run it was as if his feet were concreted to the ground he couldn’t move. “Take anything you want “Henry said hopelessly.’ We told you we want nothing but your life.”Henry was dead scared but his brain still managed to work-he figured the men must have wanted something otherwise they would have shot him already or at least that’s what he thought. Henry looked down the barrel of the shotgun and finally one of the men spoke “we know your father Mark Symons, we would like you to tell us where he lives.”Henry was about to tell them but something stopped him. He thought of all the things his dad had done for him. He had raised Henry all on his own after Henry’s mum had died in a car crash when Henry was only two years old. Henry at that moment in time made the mistake of his LIFE-literally.”No, find him yourself you dirty piece of-“Bang! The ear piercing and unmistakable sound of a shotgun went off. Henry was blown back by the force. In about a million movies you’ll see people’s life flash past them before they die, Henry thought this was a load of bull but just as promised it did. He saw his mum’s face looking at him over the cottage and meeting him with a warm smile-whether this was his real mother or not was unknown but she looked about thirty with black hair and a lovely smile.Sudenly the vision disappeared and was replaced by his dad’s who’s face he knew for sure tucking him into bed and kissing him on the forehead. He studied his dads face and then his eyes closed with his father’s memory still in his eyes-the last face he would ever see. Chapter 1 Constable Ryan sighed before knocking on the door three times making an unusual sound on the door he allowed himself a small smile as he remembered it was the secret door knock he and his 6 year old son had made but his smile quickly faded as a clearly emotional Mark Symons came out of the door. Constable Ryan wondered how he had found out his son was dead but quickly figured out that the news must have already broadcasted the tragedy on TV. “Sir it looks like you already know but I must officially inform you that your son Henry Symons has been confirmed dead in jackal street “Ryan continued in a soothing voice, “I want to tell you that on behalf of the homicide team we will do everything we possibly can to catch the people who did this, is there anything you can tell us to aid this investigation? Can you think of anyone who would want to hurt your son? Mark opened his mouth to speak but broke into an emotional fit before he could say anything. “Take your time “said Ryan soothingly. After a few minutes Mark seemed to get hold of himself and finally managed a few words. “My son was a lovely boy who had no enemies “Ryan had alot more questions to ask but couldn’t think straight as he had a six year old boy at home and couldn’t begin to think how hard it would be for Mark. Mark spoke once again “now if you’ll excuse me officer” Mark said muffling a sob and flicking down his sun glasses to cover his blood shot eyes. ”I have a funeral to organise” Chapter 2 Con Francesco had messed up and Peter Rasso was not happy “you stupid moron, the hell do you think you are!!!What? You think you’re all gangster? You’re nothing but a pile of turd!”Rasso shouted.Fransesco pathetically tried to apoligise,”sorry boss “he said weakly in his thick Jamaican accent. But Rasso wasn’t done “Jesus! You killed our only lead!!!!Ten years we’ve been after the dog and you wasted our only lead!!!!!!!”He paced up and down the floor his footsteps that's weird...i pasted my whole story...it didnt all show up hmmm thanks nayway

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  1. Anna Sophia Says:

    Not bad on the whole, but you do need to work on your grammar, spelling, and other technical things. I hope this helped.

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